PLEASE HELP REVISE ESSAY!

Work on your intro............. talk about the animals; their roles; what is expected of them, and then write a thesis statement on what you've used here in the body of your essay.

Conclusion: Use your last sentence as the first

Throughout the novel, Golding makes us aware of how intelligence ends up being penalized. Piggy's character remains powerless........... No one acknowledges or respects his intelligence or listens to what he has to say.

When is this paper due? I'd like to help you smooth out the rough edges, but if you need it for this mornings classes it's going to be rough!

it's due in 1.5 hours! if you could, i would be incredibly happy. btw, there are no animals, Piggy is the name of the boy. please help me rewrite my thesis. the main idea is: intelligence is not valued/penalized.

* but i need it as soon as possible which is around 7:25 at the latest :(

I apologize; I looked at your post and immediately thought "Animal Farm." I guess I shouldn't assume 'novels' so early in the morning. I'll be back. :-D

thank-you so much!

William Golding's, Lord of The Flies, follows a group of boys who crash land on a deserted island, and their ensuing struggle to survive. As the island's only inhabitants, the boys are forced to govern themselves and balance the difference between right and wrong, civility and barbarity, and to dole out responsibility according to individual talents or lack thereof. Piggy, one of the novels main characters, is by far the most intelligent, but his authority and ability to contribute to the community are unfortunately impaired by physical ailments and initial lack of respect.

Piggy’s physical and medical issues complicate his life and stand in the way of accomplishing activities the others easily accomplish. Many of the other boys are confident in themselves and are ready to participate. Piggy is the exact opposite; he is a person who lives in his mind, dependent on his intelligence, whereas the others depend on their bodies and physical strengths. They assume that Piggy is odd and abnormal, which results to him not fitting in. The boys look upon Piggy as just the “smart guy," a role commonly deemed a social outcast. “You’re talking too much. Shut up, Fatty,” (Pg. 20). Weak individuals such as Piggy have difficulty fitting in since our society has pushed the idea of popularity and control as desirable traits. In order to have that, you must have authority, but befriending Piggy weakens that chance since the others will likely judge.

The boy's inability or lack of desire to really know and understand Piggy results in his being judged and insulted. His poor first impression sets the tone for how he is treated. They unwisely disrespect Piggy's words and actions believing them to be insignificant; Ralph is the only one who concedes how truly valuable Piggy's advice really is, but even he strays from Piggy's ideas simply because he does not yearn for the truth; it simply isn't important.

When the boys became aware of the truth of Piggy's criticisms they resented him for it, and were annoyed how he couldn’t see his own flaws instead. His strengths were recognized, but they were penalized rather than valued. Making the sundials was a remarkable suggestion. Piggy isn’t just bright, he's innovative as well. Unfortunately for everyone, his ideas are rejected. “What are we? Humans? Or animals? Or Savages?” (Pg.98). The thought of civilization is not apparent to the boys, so Piggy’s ideas on keeping in order are pointless.

Piggy's glasses are one of Golding's most important uses of symbolism. They represent civilization, a symbol and reminder of the intellectual side of humanity. His eyesight may be weak, but his insight is powerful. Piggy is bullied to the point where his glasses are taken away, and because of this he's made helpless and unable to handle the rigor of the island. Piggy in turn gains confidence by standing up for himself, but his character is unappreciated, his intelligence ignored and uncared for. His stand only makes matters worse. The boys see him as just another animal, hence he's killed as though he was one. Ironically, they have become animals themselves by their acceptance of murder. “He lay against a log, his mouth gaping, blue shadows creeping round his lips. Nobody minded him.” (Pg.111).

Throughout the novel, Golding makes us aware and informs us how intelligence ends up being penalized. Piggy's character remains powerless; no one acknowledges or respects what he says or how intelligent he really is. Even when he is courteous and stands up for himself, the others continue to push him down. His intelligence is needless and valueless in a society that has no interest in the truth, and thus he's killed like a beast. Survival of the fittest.

I wish I would have had more time to really help you with this. I've tried to smooth out the rough edges.......... you need to go through it before handing it in.......... I'm off to work. Good Luck!