i have to write an essay on how holden relates to the adults in his life and how this shapes his view on adulthood.
iv done 8 paragraphs .but the teacher doesn't like paragraph 6 which is about his previous teacher Mr Antolini. iv wrote how Mr antolini understands holden and isn't phony and how he doesn't mind holden being drunk and smoking and how Mr antolini is Holden's last hope of finding a positive adult in his life . Mr antolini does give holden advice as a friend not as a teacher.
- - my teacher thinks thats all right but the part he wants me to expand is this part-
although Mr antolini does freak holden out a bit as he sits and pats holden head while holden sleeps.
iv wrote how this scares holden and Mr antolini has broken Holden's last hope of finding a positive adult role model in his life . my teacher also finds that part alright its just the part above he wants me to make better and I'm really stuck. i have my English nab on this tomorrow and i need help.